Question

【題目】書面表達(dá)

在你的成長過程中，母親會給你的一生帶來很大的影響，請根據(jù)表格中的提示向讀者介紹你的母親，具體要求如下：

年齡	40
職業(yè)	過去是工人；現(xiàn)在是當(dāng)?shù)毓�司的秘書�?/span>
性格	工作高標(biāo)準(zhǔn)； 自信、勤奮(舉一例) 有時有點(diǎn)幽默；
興趣愛好	有時彈鋼琴，工作與愛好間獲得平衡； 常聽古典音樂，因有持久價值；
最喜愛的顏色	綠色，因?yàn)?/span>……（至少兩點(diǎn)）
我的感受	充滿愛心，良師益友，…… (至少一點(diǎn))

注意：

1．表達(dá)中必須包含所給要點(diǎn)，可以適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，不要簡單翻譯。

2．詞數(shù)100左右。開頭已經(jīng)寫好，不計人總詞數(shù)。

3．表達(dá)中請勿提及真實(shí)校名及本人姓名。

My mother has influenced me a lot since I was born. _______________________________________

Answer 1

【答案】My mother has influenced me a lot since I was born .She is 40 years old. She used to be a worker. Now she is a secretary of a local company.

She works to high standards. She is confident and hard-working. She always does extra work. Sometimes she is a little humorous. She loves green because it’s an energetic colour. It represents new life because it is the colour of nature.

She likes playing the piano in her free time. She always achieves a balance between work and hobbies. She often listens to classical music because it has a lasting value.

I think my mother has a heart full of love. She is not only my good teacher but also my good friend. I have learnt a lot from her. I love her very much

【解析】

本文屬于材料作文，介紹你的母親。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。

亮點(diǎn)說明：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語言表達(dá)符合英語習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時態(tài)、主謂一致，特別使用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句，如used to, standard, a little, represent, free time, between...and..., because, a heart full of love以及not only...but also等。增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句子通順，行文連貫。