Question

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KIDS HAVE AN OPINION TOO!

Hi! I’m Sigmund Friend, the editor (編輯) of a new magazine KIDVOICE.

We like hearing from kids. We know you’ve got things to say.

We want to hear from you.

Here is a topic you might have an opinion about. . .

注意：

1.對(duì)所有要點(diǎn)逐一陳述，適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。

2.詞數(shù)80左右，文章的開(kāi)頭已經(jīng)給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

3.文中不得提及有關(guān)考生個(gè)人身份的任何信息，如校名、人名等。

Kids and Learning

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Answer 1

【答案】Kids and Learning
All kids want to be good at learning．Some children are good at learning，but some children are good at playing，and they are not good at learning，why？This is because some children know how to balance learning and studying．
First，just as the saying goes"All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy"，a good learner should know to play properly，if he or she plays happily，he will try to learning well．Besides，all learning decrease the interest of study．Second，students should make a proper time list，and try to follow the list．Last，parents and teachers should give tips to the students so that students can have a good knowledge of the study．All in all，only when we balance the relation between playing and learning，can we be good at learning．

【解析】本文屬于圖畫(huà)作文，主要寫(xiě)一篇關(guān)于孩子和學(xué)習(xí)的的作文。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語(yǔ)言表達(dá)符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致，特別適用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句，如be good at, this is because, as the saying goes, All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy, properly, follow, tip, knowledge, besides以及all in all等。增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句子通順，行文連貫。