Question

【題目】寫作。

假如你的朋友Tony是名“偵探控”，業(yè)余時(shí)間都花在看偵探小說、電影、電視劇上，嚴(yán)重影響了學(xué)習(xí)，請根據(jù)下面提供的信息，以“ What should he do?” 為題，寫篇短文介紹他的情況，并提出你的建議。

性格特征	耐心細(xì)致、善于尋找線索，有當(dāng)偵探的天賦
業(yè)余愛好	癡迷偵探故事，經(jīng)常熬夜看電影、電視、小說
未來理想	立志成為一名偵探，相信自己一定能成功
主要問題	課上瞌睡，影響學(xué)習(xí)；缺少鍛煉，體質(zhì)不行
你的建議	······（不少于兩點(diǎn)）

要求：1. 表達(dá)清楚，語法正確，上下文連貫；

2. 必須包括所有相關(guān)信息，并作適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；

3. 詞數(shù)：100詞左右（開頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)）；

4. 不得使用真實(shí)姓名、校名和地名等。

What should he do?

My friend Tony is a detective fan.

Answer 1

【答案】

What should he do?

My friend Tony is a detective fan. He is patient and careful enough to look for clues to something important easily. He has a gift for being a detective and he hopes to be a detective in the future. He wants to prove that you can do almost anything if you never give up. He often stays up late to watch detective films, drama series or read detective novels.

As a result, he always feels sleepy in class and his hobby has a bad influence on his study. Moreover, because he seldom does sports, he is not as healthy as before.

I think it’s important for us to have some hobbies, but we can’t spend too much time on them. And we should remember the importance of study and try to achieve a balance between our hobbies and our schoolwork. Otherwise, they will do harm to us.

【解析】

試題分析：本篇作文叫小作者就Tony把業(yè)余時(shí)間都花在看偵探小說、電影、電視劇上，嚴(yán)重影響了學(xué)習(xí)這一問題發(fā)表自己的觀點(diǎn)，小作者首先要認(rèn)真閱讀前面的提示認(rèn)真審題，確定文章的中心。注意文章文體、人稱和時(shí)態(tài)。要求介紹。同時(shí)應(yīng)選用合適的連接詞或過渡詞，使文章具有一定的連貫性。小作者還必須認(rèn)真查驗(yàn)是否有漏寫情況，有無拼寫錯(cuò)誤及標(biāo)點(diǎn)誤用等。

寫作亮點(diǎn)：這篇短文不僅使用了大量的的短語，可見該生英語功底扎實(shí)。如He is patient and careful enough to look for clues to something important easily. He has a gift for being a detective and he hopes to be a detective in the future. He wants to prove that you can do almost anything if you never give up.等使文章的表達(dá)更豐富，更有邏輯性，更富有條理。