Question

【題目】五四青年節(jié)那天，你參加了學(xué)校組織的志愿者活動(dòng)。你的英語(yǔ)老師要求你寫一則英文日志，包括以下要點(diǎn)：

1. 時(shí)間：2016年5月4日

2. 地點(diǎn)：廣東博物館

3. 內(nèi)容：

七年級(jí)學(xué)生：當(dāng)導(dǎo)游，帶參觀者到不同展館

八年級(jí)學(xué)生：表演短劇，介紹廣州歷史

九年級(jí)學(xué)生：制作海報(bào)，幫助人們了解嶺南文化

4. 意義（活動(dòng)對(duì)你個(gè)人和社會(huì)的意義）

注意：1. 參考詞匯：展館（display room）、海報(bào)（poster）；

2. 詞數(shù)：80詞左右（日記的開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)入詞數(shù)）；

3. 不得透露學(xué)校、姓名等任何個(gè)人信息，否則不予評(píng)分。

Answer 1

【答案】

Wednesday, May 4th, 2016

Dear diary,

I went to the Guangdong Museum with my schoolmates to do some voluntary work today.Students from three grades took part in it and worked as different roles. Students of Grade Sevenworked as guides who took visitors to different rooms. And those of Grade Eight played a short opera, introducing Guangzhou history to tourists. As for students of Grade Nine, they madebeautiful posters which helped people know Lingnan Culture better.

In my opinion, it is of great help to hold such activities. On one hand, it is a good chance forus students to develop a sense of responsibility as well as our work ability. On the other hand, thehistory and culture can be passed on from one generation to another.

【解析】

試題分析：本篇是文化類提綱作文，主題是志愿者活動(dòng)。這個(gè)話題學(xué)生比較熟悉，在八年級(jí)下冊(cè)Unit1已經(jīng)出現(xiàn)。全文的要點(diǎn)包括活動(dòng)內(nèi)容和活動(dòng)意義。其中，活動(dòng)內(nèi)容已經(jīng)給出詳細(xì)的文字提示，學(xué)生需要做好內(nèi)容翻譯。相較之下，活動(dòng)意義沒(méi)有直接提示，學(xué)生需要對(duì)志愿者活動(dòng)有一定的認(rèn)識(shí)，且需要自行組織語(yǔ)言，難度較大。此外，全文需要用到兩種時(shí)態(tài)，活動(dòng)內(nèi)容采用一般過(guò)去時(shí)，而活動(dòng)意義則采用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。

寫作亮點(diǎn)：短文用了一些短語(yǔ)和句式，如：Students from three grades took part in it and worked as different roles. And those of Grade Eight played a short opera, introducing Guangzhou history to tourists. On one hand, it is a good chance forus students to develop a sense of responsibility as well as our work ability. On the other hand, thehistory and culture can be passed on from one generation to another.用了一些過(guò)渡詞，如：In my opinion，On one hand，On the other hand,使文章銜接自然，還用了非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞introducing Guangzhou history to tourists.增加了文章的亮點(diǎn)。