Question

【題目】文段表達(dá)。

66．每個(gè)人都有自己心目中的英雄。誰是你心中的英雄?他/她有哪些令你欽佩的事跡？你從他/她身上學(xué)到了什么？《二十一世紀(jì)學(xué)生英文報(bào)》正在舉辦以“The Hero in My Heart”為題的征文比賽活動。請你根據(jù)以下提示寫一篇不少于50詞的征文參加此次比賽。所給提示詞語供選用。

提示詞語：kind, patient, help , encourage, think

The Hero in My Heart

Everyone has the hero in his heart.

Answer 1

【答案】

The Hero in My Heart

Everyone has his hero in his heart. My hero is my grandpa. My grandpa is a simple maths teacher. He is very kind and patient.

When I was a child, I always thought to be weak because I'm thin and weak in sports and maths. Not only my teachers and classmates, but also my mother always scolds that how stupid I was. But grandpa didn't think so. He always said to me, "Don't give up, just try again". Besides, he also helped me with maths. Because of his patient and good teaching, I found maths was so interesting and became good at it day by day. Because of his encouragement, I overcome lots of difficulties and find back my confidence.

In a word, he is the greatest man in my heart. He tells me how to grow as a person through his action and words. I love my grandpa very much.

【解析】

試題分析：本篇作文叫小作者寫自己心目中的英雄。小作者首先要認(rèn)真閱讀前面的提示認(rèn)真審題，確定文章的中心。注意文章文體、人稱和時(shí)態(tài)。要求介紹。同時(shí)應(yīng)選用合適的連接詞或過渡詞，使文章具有一定的連貫性。小作者還必須認(rèn)真查驗(yàn)是否有漏寫情況，有無拼寫錯(cuò)誤及標(biāo)點(diǎn)誤用等。

寫作亮點(diǎn)：這篇短文不僅使用了大量的的短語，可見該生英語功底扎實(shí)。如Not only my teachers and classmates, but also my mother always scolds that how stupid I was.等使文章的表達(dá)更豐富，更有邏輯性，更富有條理。