Question

【題目】“人生沒有彩排，生命沒有重來”，你平安、健康、快樂地成長是父母最大的心愿。今年6月下旬學校將舉辦一場以“Keep away from the danger!” 為主題的英文演講比賽。假如你是王雷同學，大家推選你參加這次比賽。請跟進以下思維導圖提示，寫一篇英文演講稿。

寫作提示：

寫作要求：

1.不得使用真實姓名和學校名；

2.所有的提示詞都須用上，包含以上所有要點，可適當增加細節(jié)，使內(nèi)容充實，行文連貫：

3.字跡工整，語言精練，表達準確，條理清楚：

4.詞數(shù)100詞左右。(演講稿的開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。)

Keep away from the danger!

Hello! Everyone, I’m Wang Lei. The danger is around us. So we must learn how to keep away from the danger, First, we mustn’t go swimming without our parents’ or teachers’ permission.

In a word, we must try our best to keep away from the danger!

That’s all. Thank you for listening!

Answer 1

【答案】Keep away from the danger!

Hello! Everyone, I’m Wang Lei. The danger is around us. So we must learn how to keep away from the danger. First, we mustn’t go swimming without our parents’ or teachers’ permission. When we go swimming, we must wear life jackets. Second, we must obey the traffic rules. We should walk on the pavement. When we cross the street, we mustn’t look at the mobile phones. Third, we may have some friends on line, but we mustn’t believe whatever they say. Besides, don’t meet online friends alone. Fourth, we must wash our hands before having meals. Don’t eat food that goes bad because it is bad for our health. Fifth, when we are in school, we can’t run on the hallways. You should get on well with your classmates and don’t fight with them. If someone threatens you, call for help. Last but not the least, never try drugs. If you see someone selling drugs, call 110 at once.

In a word, we must try our best to keep away from the danger!

That’s all. Thank you for listening!

【解析】

這篇作文要求我們以Keep away from the danger為題，寫一篇演講稿。審題可知，題目中利用思維導圖的形式，列舉了這篇文章中應(yīng)該包括的幾個要點。觀察這個思維導圖可知，短文應(yīng)該從游泳、交通、交友、飲食、學校安全以及毒品等六個方面進行敘述，每個方面都給出了一些提示詞，學生們可以利用這些提示詞來組織語言，用完整的句子表達出來。文章應(yīng)使用一般現(xiàn)在時、第一人稱為主來敘述。寫作時應(yīng)注意：首先題目中給出的所有提示詞以及要點都應(yīng)包括在內(nèi)，不要有所遺漏�？梢愿鶕�(jù)表達需要進行拓展，使文章內(nèi)容更加充實。但應(yīng)注意拓展內(nèi)容應(yīng)與文章主題緊密相連，不要寫沒有用的東西。其次應(yīng)注意英語的表達習慣和漢語是不同的，不要根據(jù)漢語思維逐詞翻譯，寫漢語式的英語。應(yīng)從句式的正確結(jié)構(gòu)出發(fā)，選擇適當?shù)膯卧~、短語和句型。句式結(jié)構(gòu)可以簡單句為基礎(chǔ)，穿插并列句、復合句以及其他復雜結(jié)構(gòu)，提升文章檔次。同時語句之間應(yīng)使用一些銜接成分，注意敘述的層次性，條理清楚，行為連貫。