Question

假如你是林華，就個人愛好帶來的困惑給英國朋友Daniel發(fā)電子郵件進行交流并請求幫助。

林華	愛好	對實踐顏色療法(therapy)感興趣；時常建議同學……（自由發(fā)揮）；在業(yè)余時間經(jīng)常到圖書館閱讀資料或熬夜到很晚觀看相關的記錄片(documentary)
困惑	得不到父母的理解
觀點	1.業(yè)余愛好有助于從中學到很多知識；2.業(yè)余愛好將對未來的發(fā)展有利；3. ……(至少一點)
父母	觀點	時間應花在功課上；成績就是一切

注意：1. 詞數(shù)：100詞左右，信的開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。

2. 可適當發(fā)揮，但文中不要提及真實的校名和人名。

Dear Daniel,

I am writing to tell you about my problem with my parents.

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What shall I do? Can you offer me some advice? I am looking forward to your early reply.

Best wishes.

Yours,

                                                               Lin Hua

 

Answer 1

【答案】

 

One possible version:

Dear Daniel,

I am writing to tell you about my problem with my parents. I don’t know how to deal with it and would like your help.

You know I am interested in life on practicing colour therapy. I often advise my classmates on how to use colours to change their moods. In my spare time I often go to the library to find something to read. Sometimes I even stay up late watching the documentaries about it. This makes my parents very angry. To them, good marks are everything and they think I should spend more time on my lessons.

I think healthy hobbies can help me with my studies. It will also be good for my future development. What’s more, hobbies can help me relax and make my life more interesting. But I don’t think my parents understand me. I feel bad about that.

What shall I do? Can you offer me some suggestions? I am looking forward to your early reply.

Best wishes

Yours,

Lin Hua

【解析】

試題分析：本文是材料作文，考生在寫作之前必須認真審題，把握寫作要求和寫作目的。本文要求寫一篇e-mail，內(nèi)容是就個人愛好帶來的困惑給英國朋友Daniel發(fā)電子郵件進行交流并請求幫助。說個人的觀點應該用第一人稱，父母的觀點應該用they做主語。時態(tài)是一般現(xiàn)在時。寫作前最好列出提綱，寫出有關的短語和固定表達備用。

【亮點說明】 本文做到了包含所有內(nèi)容要點，語句通順，標點符號運用正確。還恰當?shù)剡\用了些短語和句式，如how to deal with ; In my spare time;否定前移等等。并注意了句子開頭的變化和的銜接如：What’s more ，But等等。

考點：圖表作文。