Question

請(qǐng)根據(jù)下列要點(diǎn)，假如你是Amy，寫(xiě)封信給你的網(wǎng)友介紹你去年暑假的一次旅行經(jīng)歷。
要求：字?jǐn)?shù)80，注意不同時(shí)態(tài)的使用，必須包含要點(diǎn)內(nèi)容。
要點(diǎn)：1.去年暑假放假兩個(gè)月，八月份參加了學(xué)校去頤和園(the Summer Palace)的校園旅行。邀請(qǐng)了吳老師加入了本次旅行。
2. 早上八點(diǎn)在校門(mén)口集中，坐公交到達(dá)公園花了兩小時(shí)，因?yàn)槁飞宪?chē)輛很多。吳老師有幽默感，在車(chē)上講笑話，我們感覺(jué)不無(wú)聊。
3. 頤和園是最美的名勝之一，同學(xué)們?cè)诠珗@里劃船，同學(xué)們互相幫助，玩得很開(kāi)心。
4. 下午四點(diǎn)回校，回家后我把照片傳到我的主頁(yè)上，你自己去看。
5. 自由發(fā)揮……
A trip to the Summer Palace
Dear John,
I am writing a letter to you to tell you something about my trip to the Summer Palace last year.
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Love,
Amy

Answer 1

Dear John,
I am writing a letter to you to tell you something about my trip to the Summer Palace last year.
We had two months’ holiday last summer,.In August,we invited Mr Wu with us to take part in the school trip to the Summer Palace.At 8:00 am,we met at the school gate .Because of many cars on the road, it took us two hours to get there by bus. Mr Wu told jokes in the bus for us. He was so humorous that we didn’t feel bored.The Summer Palace is one of the most beautiful scenic spots.We went boating in the river,we helped each other and enjoyed ourselves very much.At 4:00 pm,we returned school. I uploaded the pictures to my homepage after I came home.You can go ane see them.
Love,
Amy

試題分析：這是一篇提綱作文。本文作者寫(xiě)去年去頤和園游玩的過(guò)程，先是寫(xiě)邀請(qǐng)吳老師一起去游玩，然后寫(xiě)從出發(fā)去頤和園到返回學(xué)校這一段時(shí)間的趣事，最后寫(xiě)回到家把相片上傳到自己的主頁(yè)。游玩的過(guò)程應(yīng)該用一般過(guò)去時(shí)，對(duì)于景點(diǎn)的點(diǎn)評(píng)用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】文中使用了非常好的短語(yǔ)和句子為文章增色不少，例如take part in，.because of ,told jokes,scenic spots,each other,enjoyed ourselves等短語(yǔ)，文中還用到了狀語(yǔ)從句He was so humorous that we didn’t feel boredt和I uploaded the pictures to my homepage after I came home.文章層次清晰，內(nèi)容飽滿(mǎn)，表達(dá)流暢。