Question

【題目】對于“中學生在校是否可以使用手機”,不同學生有不同的看法,請你根據(jù)下面表格中的?提示寫一篇短文,向某英語報社投稿。

觀點	贊成	反對
理由	1.便于聯(lián)系:…… 2.獲取信息:……	1.浪費時間:…… 2.危害身心健康:……
你的觀點及理由

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2.文中不得出現(xiàn)真實人名、地名、校名等;

3.詞數(shù):80詞左右,短文開頭已給出,不計入總詞數(shù)。

Can middle school students use mobile phones at school?

Nowadays, more and more teenagers use mobile phones. Can middle school students use mobile phones at school? Different students have different opinions about it.??????????????????????????????????????????????

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Answer 1

【答案】Can middle school students use mobile phones at school?

Nowadays, more and more teenagers use mobile phones. Can middle school students use mobile phones at school? Different students have different opinions about it.

Some students think they can use mobile phones at school. First, it’s convenient for them to call their parents, teachers or friends. Second, they can search what they need on mobile phones. For example, they can look up new words and look through news.

How ever, some students disagree. They think using mobile phones at school is a waste of? time. Many students spend too much time on games and QQ. Besides, it’s unhealthy for the? mind and the body, such as hurting eyes, making some bad friends.

In my opinion, students can’t use mobile phones at school. It’s bad for our health and study.

【解析】本文屬于材料作文，要表達中學生在校使用手機的優(yōu)點和缺點以及你的觀點和理由。根據(jù)要表達的內容確定并準確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當增加內容。

【亮點說明】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務，語言表達符合英語習慣，準確運用時態(tài)、主謂一致，特別適用一些亮點詞句，如first, second, for example, look up, however, spend...on..., a waste of, besides, in my opinion以及be bad for。增強邏輯關系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準確，句子通順，行文連貫。