Question

【題目】書面表達。寫作

請你以張明的名義給英國筆友Brian寫一封感謝信，要點提示如下：

二年前你來到新的學校：

沒有朋友；

感到孤獨；

不愿學習；

……

二年中Brian多次給你寫信：

鼓勵你多交朋友；

告訴你學好英語的方法；

和你分享快樂；

……

近年來鹽城發(fā)生很大變化，你邀請他來鹽城游玩。

參考詞匯：(1)分享快樂 share happiness (2)鼓勵某人做某事 encourage sb. to do sth.

要求：(1)詞數(shù)：90字(2)信的開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)(3)要點齊全，行文連貫，可適當發(fā)揮

Dear Brian，

How time flies! We have been friends for two years. I’m writing to thank you for your help!

Two years ago

____________________________________________________________________

____________________________________________________________________

____________________________________________________________________

Hope to see you soon!

Yours,

Zhang Ming

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Brian,

How time flies! We have been friends for two years. I’m writing to thank you for your help!

Two years ago I came to the new school. I had no friends here and often felt lonely. As a result, I didn’t put my heart into my study. I just thought I wouldn’t fit this new environment.

Later I began to write to you. We became good pen pals. You encourage me to make more friends and tell me good ways to study English. So my English study has been improved greatly. With your help and encouragement, I become happier. I begin to accept my new classmates and become friends with them. I would like to share my happiness in my letter.

Now great changes have taken place in Yancheng. Welcome to come to my hometown to visit. I’d like to be your guide.

Hope to see you soon.

Yours,

Zhangmin

【解析】這篇作文要求我們以張明的名義給Brian寫一封感謝信。題目中給出了我們信中的具體內(nèi)容，主要包括三個部分，一是兩年前你剛來到學校時的情況；二是兩年來和Brian交朋友后，Brian給你的幫助；三是邀請Brian來鹽城玩。我們需要用正確的英語將這些內(nèi)容表達出來，最后分段來寫，這樣會使短文有層次，結(jié)構(gòu)清晰。寫作時需要注意，短文的第一部分需要用一般過去時態(tài)，因此要注意每句話的謂語動詞的形式�？梢赃m當增加一些內(nèi)容，使短文更加完整，但要注意增加的內(nèi)容要符合全文的整體邏輯。多使用好的句型和短語，使文章的表達流暢完整。

寫作亮點：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，短文中作者按照題目的要求完整的將這封信的內(nèi)容表達了出來。短文內(nèi)容完整，結(jié)構(gòu)清晰。首先作者寫了自己兩年前剛來到這個新學校時的情況，I had no friends here and often felt lonely、As a result, I didn’t put my heart into my study；接下來作者寫的是和Brian成為朋友后的情況，You encourage me to make more friends and tell me good ways to study English，這一部分中用到的短語和句型有encourage sb. to do sth.、good ways to…, with one’s help等；最后作者向Brian發(fā)出邀請，Now great changes have taken place in Yancheng. Welcome to come to my hometown to visit。全文語言準確，意思連貫。