Question

假設(shè)你是高山，你的外教Mr.Smith相組織幾名學(xué)生去一個(gè)學(xué)校進(jìn)行一次助學(xué)和聯(lián)誼活動(dòng)。請(qǐng)參看以下信息，以書信的形式向Mr.Smith提出申請(qǐng)，說明你打算如何開展這次活動(dòng)并陳述理由。

能力	計(jì)劃
善于交流	相處融洽
愛好，例如…	組織活動(dòng)
英語口語好	幫助學(xué)習(xí)英語，如…

注意：
1. 表達(dá)中必須包括所給要點(diǎn)， 適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，不要簡單翻譯。
2. 詞數(shù)90左右。開頭已經(jīng)寫好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
3. 表達(dá)中請(qǐng)勿提及真實(shí)校名及姓名。
Dear Mr.Smith
I’m so excited to know that our school is organizing an activity to help the kids in a school. I hope I __________________________________________________________
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I’ll be thankful if you give ne the chance!
Yours
Gao Shan   

Answer 1

Dear Mr.Smith
I’m so excited to know that our school is organizing an activity to help the kids in a school. I hope I can join in it. I think I have the abilities to help them. First I’ll get on well with the kids there.. I can do it because I always communicate well with others. And I have a few hobbies, such as playing basketball, ping-pong and singing songs. So I’m going to help organize after-class activities. Also, I speak good English. I can help the kids with their English. I’ll read English loud with them and teach them English songs. It’s really fun.
I’ll be thankful if you give ne the chance!
Yours
Gao Shan

試題分析：這是一篇表格作文。本文要求按照題目要求并結(jié)合表格中的內(nèi)容完成這篇申請(qǐng)報(bào)告，我們要用恰當(dāng)?shù)恼Z言把所列舉的內(nèi)容準(zhǔn)確地表達(dá)出來。寫作中要包含你的能力和組織這次活動(dòng)的計(jì)劃等幾個(gè)方面進(jìn)行陳述，表達(dá)出個(gè)人的觀點(diǎn)等。根據(jù)材料內(nèi)容可知本文主要是一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，人稱主要是第一人稱，注意并列連詞的使用及主謂一致問題。寫作中注意上下文的過度，符合邏輯關(guān)系。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】這篇短文簡明、扼要地闡明了自己的申請(qǐng)目的和要求及自己具備的能力和組織活動(dòng)的計(jì)劃等，并包含了文中所要求的基本信息，并展開了合理的聯(lián)想。其中使用了一些固定句式和短語，包含狀語從句和賓語從句的準(zhǔn)確使用為文章增色不少.如 I’m so excited to know that our school is organizing an activity to help the kids in a school.，I can do it because I always communicate well with others.，get on well with the kids，help the kids with their English學(xué)習(xí)中再注意總結(jié)，牢記一些固定句式及短語，寫作時(shí)就可以適當(dāng)引用，使文章的表達(dá)更有邏輯性，更富有條理。