Question

【題目】寫作

Tom去年來到大明所在的學(xué)校學(xué)習(xí)。在學(xué)習(xí)期間，他對學(xué)校提倡的“創(chuàng)建和諧校園”活動感觸頗深。他發(fā)現(xiàn)該校的學(xué)生學(xué)習(xí)主動，興趣廣泛，友愛互助，師生之間關(guān)系融洽，人與環(huán)境和諧相處（如：保持環(huán)境衛(wèi)生，愛護(hù)花草樹木，不隨地亂扔廢棄物等）。

1.請你以Tom 的名義，給遠(yuǎn)在美國的父母寫一封信，介紹學(xué)校的現(xiàn)狀并談?wù)勀愕母惺堋?/span>

2.文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的姓名，校名或地名。

3.詞數(shù)90左右。

Dear Mum and Dad,

Time flies! I’ve been here for nearly a year. I’ve been here for nearly a year. I’m very pleased to find our school is a good one. The students in our school

Yours,

Tom

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Mum and Dad,

Time flies! I've been here for nearly a year. I'm very pleased to find that our school is really a good one. The students in our school work hard at their lessons. They take an active part in activities that help to improve their qualities and health. They are friendly to each other and always ready to help each other.

The teachers here all enjoy their work and they love their students. They work hard and do what they can do to help their students. And the students respect their teachers. They get on well with each other. The students in our school try their best to keep the school yard clean and tidy. They never throw waste about nor pick the flowers.

In a word, I am deeply impressed by the harmonious atmosphere in this school. I love my new school.

Yours,

Tom

【解析】

試題分析：本題要求以Tom 的名義，給遠(yuǎn)在美國的父母寫一封信，介紹學(xué)校的現(xiàn)狀并談?wù)勀愕母惺�。動筆前先要注意認(rèn)真閱讀材料，確定寫作內(nèi)容；分析內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，列出一些基本詞匯及詞組；注意表達(dá)的條理性，用好連接詞；為豐富文章的文采，可以多用一些復(fù)合句。最后，注意不要犯語法、句法以及搭配性錯(cuò)誤，寫好后反復(fù)讀幾遍，適當(dāng)修改。

寫作亮點(diǎn)：本文要點(diǎn)明確，語言精練。層次分明。不同要點(diǎn)英語使用的句式也不一樣。語言的表述符合語法的結(jié)構(gòu)，運(yùn)用了大量的短語：be pleased to, work hard at, take an active part in, be friendly to, be ready to, get on well with, try one’s best to do 等等。復(fù)合句They work hard and do what they can do to help their students.表達(dá)的非常到位；一個(gè)被動語態(tài)的句子使用的也很得體：I am deeply impressed by the harmonious atmosphere in this school.