Question

書(shū)面表達(dá)： Life is just like a mirror（鏡子） , you smile at it , and it smiles at you ,too.請(qǐng)以“Learn to smile ”為題寫(xiě)一篇文章

提示：1，學(xué)會(huì)對(duì)自己微笑

      2， 學(xué)會(huì)對(duì)他人微笑

      3， 微笑是一種語(yǔ)言

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Answer 1

【答案】

 

Learn to smile

Life is just like a mirror, you smile at it, and it smiles at you，too. So we must learn to smile. You need to smile when you face to the trouble. If you were misunderstood or did badly in the exam, you can smile at yourself. Smile is a kind of encouragement. It can make you believe in yourself. The most important thing is that smile can make you have a good health.

     Smiling at others is easy. It can make anyone happy and it can bring the happiness to others. So do you. When your friends fail, your smile means "Have another try!"

     Smile is a kind of language which can't be heard by anyone, but persons who always know its meaning, So when you smile, although you don't say any word, you can get much. Let’s learn to smile often, I believe it can make the whole warm and you will get a happy life. 

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇命題作文，題目為L(zhǎng)earn to smile，學(xué)會(huì)微笑，要求我們從三個(gè)方面進(jìn)行表達(dá)，即學(xué)會(huì)對(duì)自己微笑、學(xué)會(huì)對(duì)他人微笑、微笑是一種語(yǔ)言。我們的文章應(yīng)該從這三個(gè)方面著手進(jìn)行。寫(xiě)好這篇文章的關(guān)鍵是說(shuō)明白我們?yōu)槭裁匆獙W(xué)會(huì)微笑，微笑對(duì)自己，對(duì)他人，對(duì)這個(gè)世界有什么好處。同時(shí)我們還要注意表達(dá)的準(zhǔn)確性。還要使用好的連接詞和句型以使文意連貫，流暢。通過(guò)審題可知這篇文章應(yīng)注意使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)表達(dá)，注意分段，使文章有層次。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這篇范文書(shū)寫(xiě)規(guī)范，內(nèi)容完整，層次分明。文章分成三段來(lái)進(jìn)行闡述。第一段主要表達(dá)的是smile at yourself，對(duì)自己微笑；第二段是smile at others，對(duì)別人微笑；第三段是一個(gè)總結(jié)段，smile is a kind of language，微笑是一種語(yǔ)言，它可以給自己，給別人，給這個(gè)世界帶來(lái)好處。文章注意使用不同的句型和排比句來(lái)增強(qiáng)文章的表現(xiàn)力，如You need to smile when you face to the trouble. If you were misunderstood or did bad in the exam, you can smile at yourself、So when you smile, although you don't say any word, you can get much、It can make anyone happy and it can bring the happiness to others等。整體表達(dá)流暢，有節(jié)奏。

考點(diǎn)：話題作文。