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提示：假如你是Mike，請(qǐng)根據(jù)下面所給的Mike的family tree，以My Family為題，寫(xiě)一篇小短文。要求條理清楚，意思連貫，語(yǔ)句通順，標(biāo)點(diǎn)正確，書(shū)寫(xiě)清晰規(guī)范。要將所給的內(nèi)容全部體現(xiàn)在短文中：Mr Jim Brown警察40歲，Mrs Brown英語(yǔ)教師37歲，Ann Brown光明中學(xué)三年級(jí)二班13歲，Mike Brown立達(dá)中學(xué)一年級(jí)四班11歲。

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參考答案： 　　Hello, friends! My name is Mike Brown. Please come and meet my family. My father is Jim Brown. He's 40. He's a policeman. My mother is Lily Brown. She's 37. She's an English teacher. I have a sister. Her name is Ann Brown. She is thirteen. She's in Class Two, Grade Three, Guangming Middle School. I'm eleven. I'm in the same school, but I'm in Class Four, Grade One. Look! This is my family! 　　【解析】這是一篇“提示＋圖表”形式的書(shū)面表達(dá)題。做題時(shí)首先要圍繞提供的信息進(jìn)行認(rèn)真的審題，通過(guò)審題要明確以下兩點(diǎn)主要要求： 　　1．要以“My Family”為題寫(xiě)一篇不少于60個(gè)單詞的小短文。 　　2．短文一定要以第一人稱(chēng)的口吻來(lái)寫(xiě)。 　　其次，同過(guò)審題明確要求之后，就要列出要點(diǎn)： 　　1) my name, Mike Brown 　　2) my father, Jim Brown, 40, policeman 　　3) my mother, Lily Brown, 37, an English teacher 　　4) have a sister, Ann Brown, 13, Class Two, Grade Three, Guangming Middle School 　　5) I, eleven, in the same school, in Class Four, Grade One 　　3．在列出的要點(diǎn)之間加上適當(dāng)?shù)脑~或詞組，把要點(diǎn)組合初稿。在組合過(guò)程中尤其要注意謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞與人稱(chēng)之間的一致性，同時(shí)注意標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)和大小寫(xiě)。 　　初稿如下： 　　My name is Mike Brown. My father is Jim Brown. He's 40. He's a policeman. My mother is Lily Brown. She's 37. She's an English teacher. I have a sister. Her name is Ann Brown. She is thirteen. She's in Class Two, Grade Three, Guangming Middle School. I'm eleven. I'm in the same school. I'm in Class Four, Grade One. 　　4．形成初稿后，要根據(jù)提示要求進(jìn)一步復(fù)查，檢查是否有要點(diǎn)遺漏，謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞是否運(yùn)用準(zhǔn)確，單詞是否有拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤，大小寫(xiě)、標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)是否都正確。另外還要檢查詞數(shù)是否符合規(guī)定的要求，整個(gè)短文的意思是否連貫。根據(jù)這些要求，通過(guò)對(duì)上面初稿的復(fù)查，覺(jué)得短文的詞數(shù)還太少，且短文單調(diào)。因此，我們可以將短文修改為下面的短文。