Question

【題目】【2016廣東廣州】書面表達(dá)。

五四青年節(jié)那天，你參加了學(xué)校組織的志愿者活動。你的英語老師要求你寫一則英文日志，包括以下要點(diǎn)：

1. 時間：2016年5月4日

2. 地點(diǎn)：廣東博物館

3. 內(nèi)容：

七年級學(xué)生：當(dāng)導(dǎo)游，帶參觀者到不同展館

八年級學(xué)生：表演短劇，介紹廣州歷史

九年級學(xué)生：制作海報(bào)，幫助人們了解嶺南文化

4. 意義（活動對你個人和社會的意義）

注意：1. 參考詞匯：展館（display room）、海報(bào)（poster）；

2. 詞數(shù)：80詞左右（日記的開頭已給出，不計(jì)入詞數(shù)）；

3. 不得透露學(xué)校、姓名等任何個人信息，否則不予評分。

Answer 1

【答案】

Wednesday, May 4th, 2016

Dear diary,

I went to the Guangdong Museum with my schoolmates to do some voluntary work today.Students from three grades took part in it and worked as different roles. Students of Grade Sevenworked as guides who took visitors to different rooms. And those of Grade Eight played a short opera, introducing Guangzhou history to tourists. As for students of Grade Nine, they madebeautiful posters which helped people know Lingnan Culture better.

In my opinion, it is of great help to hold such activities. On one hand, it is a good chance forus students to develop a sense of responsibility as well as our work ability. On the other hand, thehistory and culture can be passed on from one generation to another.

【解析】

試題分析：本篇是文化類提綱作文，主題是志愿者活動。這個話題學(xué)生比較熟悉，在八年級下冊Unit1已經(jīng)出現(xiàn)。全文的要點(diǎn)包括活動內(nèi)容和活動意義。其中，活動內(nèi)容已經(jīng)給出詳細(xì)的文字提示，學(xué)生需要做好內(nèi)容翻譯。相較之下，活動意義沒有直接提示，學(xué)生需要對志愿者活動有一定的認(rèn)識，且需要自行組織語言，難度較大。此外，全文需要用到兩種時態(tài)，活動內(nèi)容采用一般過去時，而活動意義則采用一般現(xiàn)在時。

寫作亮點(diǎn)：短文用了一些短語和句式，如：Students from three grades took part in it and worked as different roles. And those of Grade Eight played a short opera, introducing Guangzhou history to tourists. On one hand, it is a good chance forus students to develop a sense of responsibility as well as our work ability. On the other hand, thehistory and culture can be passed on from one generation to another.用了一些過渡詞，如：In my opinion，On one hand，On the other hand,使文章銜接自然，還用了非謂語動詞introducing Guangzhou history to tourists.增加了文章的亮點(diǎn)。