Question

【題目】你的好朋友約翰是一名九年級(jí)的學(xué)生，目前他遇到了不少麻煩。請(qǐng)根據(jù)提示內(nèi)容，用英語(yǔ)寫一篇介紹好朋友約翰的短文。

Personality	有條理，注意細(xì)節(jié)，富有愛心
Hobby	癡迷于畫畫，擅長(zhǎng)用色彩來表達(dá)自己的想法；最喜歡黃色，因?yàn)?/span>……
Problems	1. 父母對(duì)自己很嚴(yán)格, 太在乎考試分?jǐn)?shù) 2.經(jīng)常熬夜做作業(yè)，疑惑是否值得花費(fèi)如此多的時(shí)間
Your advice	1. ...... 2. ......

注意：1. 短文須包括所有內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，要求語(yǔ)句通順、意思連貫；

2. 要點(diǎn)須用展開合理想象，作適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；

3. 詞數(shù)在100個(gè)左右，短文首尾已在答題卡上給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；

John, a Grade 9 student, is my best friend. He is

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I really hope my advice can be valuable to him.

Answer 1

【答案】John, a Grade 9 student, is my best friend. He is well-organized and pays attention to details. Besides, he has a heart full of love. John is crazy about drawing and he is good at expressing his own thoughts by using colors. His favourite color is yellow as it is the color of the sun and it represents success.

However, he has some problems at present. First, his parents are strict with him and they care too much about marks after each exam. Then, he often stays up so late to finish his homework that he even doubts whether it is worth spending so much time on it.

My suggestions are as follows. I think he’d better communicate more with his parents. It’s also a good idea for him to plan his time carefully so that he can finish his homework on time. In addition, maybe he should make a list of all the homework that he needs to do and work out how much time he needs.

I really hope my advice can be valuable to him.

【解析】

這篇作文的寫作背景是一名九年級(jí)的好朋友約翰目前他遇到了不少麻煩，需要寫一篇介紹好朋友約翰的短文，具體的信息已經(jīng)通過表格的形式給了出來，包括約翰的性格、愛好、遇到的問題，這些部分的細(xì)節(jié)信息也給出了，但是關(guān)于建議這一塊沒有給出，需要自行補(bǔ)充，完成寫作，總體來說寫作的難度不大，要注意自己給出的建議要有條理，語(yǔ)言不要過于復(fù)雜，要清晰明了，讓人一讀就懂，不要長(zhǎng)篇大論，一到兩句話即可，在此基礎(chǔ)上保證用詞準(zhǔn)確，語(yǔ)句連貫。

首先作文進(jìn)行了性格的描述，相關(guān)短語(yǔ)應(yīng)用準(zhǔn)確，例如：well-organized 有條理的，pays attention to 關(guān)注…，a heart full of love 充滿愛心， is crazy about 癡迷于…，is good at 擅長(zhǎng)于…，expressing his own thoughts 表達(dá)他自己的思想，represents success 代表成功，在完成第一段的具體信息的描寫后，第二段開始介紹他存在的一些困難，用到的表達(dá)有：are strict with him 對(duì)…嚴(yán)格，care too much about 過多關(guān)注…，stays up so late 熬夜很晚，finish his homework 完成家庭作業(yè)，spending so much time on 在…上花費(fèi)了太多的時(shí)間。最后一段用來表述自己的建議，用到的表達(dá)有：My suggestions are as follows. 我的建議如下，communicate more with his parents 和他的父母更多地溝通，plan his time 規(guī)劃他的時(shí)間，In addition 另外。最后一段表達(dá)了希望，希望自己的建議能對(duì)他有價(jià)值。總體來說寫作內(nèi)容完整，完成了寫作任務(wù)。