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2016年4月14號(hào)，世界著名的籃球明星科比宣布退役，作為人們心目中的籃球偶像，科比影響了一代又一代人。最近你校舉行以＂The person who has influenced me most＂為題的中學(xué)生英語征文活動(dòng)，Kobe Bryant深深地影響著你，請根據(jù)表格中的內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)完成征文。

	基本情況	1. 出生于1978年8月； 2. 從小對籃球感興趣，1996年成為NBA球員； 3. 不僅在美國出名而且在全世界受歡迎。
	成功的原因	1. 從未放棄自己的夢想； 2. ……
	對我的影響	……

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1. 短文應(yīng)包括所有的內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)�？蛇m當(dāng)發(fā)揮，以使行文連貫；

2. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱；

3. 詞數(shù)80左右，短文開頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

The person who has influenced me most

On 14th April， 2016， Kobe Bryant announced his retirement. He is the person who has influenced me most.

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Answer 1

【答案】

The person who has influenced me most

On 14th April， 2016， Kobe Bryant announced his retirement. He is the person who has influenced me most.

He was born in August， 1978. When he was very young he became interested in basketball. He became a member of NBA in 1996. He is well-known not only in America but also all over the world. Usually he practices basketball harder than others even if he plays better. He never gives up hope and his dream. Through hard work， he made many achievements. Kobe Bryant is the person who I admire. His success proved that ＂Where there is a will， there is a way.＂

【解析】

試題分析：考生首先要認(rèn)真閱讀前面的提示認(rèn)真審題，確定文章的中心。注意文章文體、人稱和時(shí)態(tài)。從提示可知，這是一篇人物介紹，人稱為第三人稱，時(shí)態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，一般過去時(shí)態(tài)為主，注意主謂一致，同時(shí)應(yīng)選用合適的連接詞或過渡詞，使文章具有一定的連貫性。

寫作亮點(diǎn)：這篇文章語言規(guī)范，敘事清楚，詞匯及時(shí)態(tài)運(yùn)用正確，能夠把提示的內(nèi)容敘述清楚，語句通順，意思連貫是一篇不錯(cuò)的文章。諺語的使用His success proved that ＂Where there is a will， there is a way.＂為文章增色不少。