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【題目】 書(shū)面表達(dá)

A Good Friend In My Mind

英國(guó)有句諺語(yǔ)：結(jié)識(shí)新朋友，不忘老朋友，老朋友是金，新朋友是銀(Make new friends, but keep the old; Those are silver, these are gold. )。中國(guó)自古亦有“有朋自遠(yuǎn)方來(lái)，不亦樂(lè)乎？”等描繪朋友之間友情的名句。初中的學(xué)習(xí)生活即將結(jié)束了，在這段時(shí)間里你一定結(jié)識(shí)了許多朋友，并產(chǎn)生了深厚的友誼。請(qǐng)你寫(xiě)一篇文章介紹一位你心目中的好朋友。文章必須包含以下內(nèi)容：1. 人物簡(jiǎn)介；2. 給你的幫助；3. 你的感受。

要求： 1）條理清楚，意思連貫，語(yǔ)句通順，標(biāo)點(diǎn)正確、邏輯清晰；

2）文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的姓名和校名；

3）80詞左右。（開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)入總次數(shù)。）

A life without friends is like a life without the sun. Nobody can live alone in the world….

Answer 1

【答案】

A Good Friend In My Mind

A life without friends is like a life without the sun. Nobody can live alone in the world.I deeply believe that everyone has their most important people in their lifetime. For me, that's my classmate, Tom.I still remember that once my leg was badly hurt in a football match, and I had to stay in bed for two weeks. While I was worried about school work at home, my classmate Tom came to help me. He told me what the teacher taught in class, and helped me a lot with my math problems. I was deeply moved because he kept teaching me until I returned to school. I was glad that I caught up with my classmates.From then on, we became best friends. I truly understood that a friend in need is a friend in deed.

【解析】

試題分析：本文屬于開(kāi)放性文體，能夠很大程度上調(diào)動(dòng)學(xué)生的想象空間，學(xué)生可以結(jié)合自己的經(jīng)歷，首先對(duì)每個(gè)人在他們心中都有一個(gè)重要的人物，這個(gè)現(xiàn)象進(jìn)行肯定，接下來(lái)結(jié)合自己的一次經(jīng)歷，說(shuō)明他是如何幫助我的，如何給了最深的印象。最后對(duì)自己所經(jīng)歷的事情的感受進(jìn)行描寫(xiě)。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】文中考查了學(xué)生連詞成句的能力外，還要求學(xué)生能夠變換句式，學(xué)會(huì)用不同的表達(dá)，來(lái)表達(dá)同一個(gè)意思，要在“準(zhǔn)”字和“美”上下功夫。在寫(xiě)作中注意人稱與謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞的數(shù)關(guān)系和動(dòng)詞時(shí)態(tài)等諸多方面，同時(shí)要學(xué)會(huì)多用副詞來(lái)修飾謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞，這樣顯示出深厚的語(yǔ)言根底。 注意多背誦范文，對(duì)于寫(xiě)的好的句子進(jìn)行默寫(xiě)，考試時(shí)就能寫(xiě)出準(zhǔn)確地道的作文。