Question

【題目】In 60-120 words, write about the topic“A goal I would like to achieve”.（以“一個我想實現(xiàn)的目標”為題，

寫一篇 60-120 個詞的短文，標點符號不占格）

The following are for reference only.（以下內(nèi)容僅供參考）

What is your goal?

Why do you want to do this?

How do you plan to achieve your goal?

（注意：文中不得出現(xiàn)考生的姓名、校名及其他相關(guān)信息，否則不予評分。）

Answer 1

【答案】A goal I would like to achieve

We all have goals. As for me, my goal is to become a teacher. In my opinion, it is one of the greatest jobs in the world.

In order to realize my goal, I will work hard at my lesson first. Only when I have solid basic knowledge can I teach my students well. Second, I will develop my hobbies. As for a teacher, I must have a wide range of interests. What’s more, I decide to join some volunteer activities, such as helping the disabled. It is good to train my patience.

As a Chinese verb says, A journey of a thousand miles begins with the first step. I will fight for my dream from now on.

【解析】

本文屬于話題作文，介紹你的目標是什么、原因以及如何實現(xiàn)你的目標。根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定并準確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當增加內(nèi)容。

亮點說明：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語言表達符合英語習(xí)慣，準確運用時態(tài)、主謂一致，特別使用一些亮點詞句，如as for me, in one’s opinion, one of the+形容詞最高級+名詞復(fù)數(shù), in order to, “only+狀語”放句首用半倒裝, develop my habits, what’s more, decide to do, it is good to train my patience中it做形式主語，真正的主語為to train my patience, as a Chinese verb says, a journey of a thousand miles begins with the first step, fight for以及from now on。增強邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準確，句子通順，行文連貫。