Question

【題目】初級寫作（15分）

請根據(jù)下列表格的提示, 寫一篇題為Changes in My Hometown的短文。（80詞左右）

內(nèi)容要點:

過去 現(xiàn)在

1.舊房 1.高樓

2.河水骯臟 2.河水清澈

3.步行、騎自行車上班 3.乘公交車、小汽車上班

4.道路狹窄 4.環(huán)形路寬闊

5.居住條件差 5.居住環(huán)境舒適

Changes in My Hometown

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Answer 1

【答案】

Changes in My Hometown

My hometown is very big town / village with green trees all around, people live a rich life.

However, people used to live old houses. The river was very dirty. The roads were narrow and the living conditions were hard. People went to work on foot or by bike. But now, there are many tall buildings and big department stores in my hometown. The river is clean and the water is clear. There are many ring roads and the living conditions are comfortable. People usually go to work by bus or by car. A lot of people have their own cars. Everyone protects the environment. Many tourists go to my hometown for sightseeing

I am glad to see these great changes in my hometown. I think my hometown will be much more beautiful in the future.

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇提綱作文，讓我們根據(jù)所給材料寫一封邀請信，邀請全班同學(xué)參加一個活動，材料中有詳細(xì)的時間及活動安排，我們要用正確的時態(tài)按照時間順序把這一天的行程表達(dá)清楚。通過分析可知，本篇短文應(yīng)主要用一般將來時，第一人稱復(fù)數(shù)表達(dá)。寫作時注意行文連貫，表達(dá)清楚，不要遺漏要點。并且多使用好的短語和句型以使文章流暢。

寫作亮點：這篇作文寫得比較清楚，詳細(xì)，對材料中的時間及活動安排表達(dá)的很清楚，并且按時間順序交代了這一天的行程。寫作的人稱和時態(tài)都切合題意。并且文中也用了一些較好的句型，這些句型的使用使文章流暢，富有條理。