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【題目】書面表達(dá)

近來，各中學(xué)在組織學(xué)生外出旅游時(shí)因各種原因常常會(huì)陷入兩難選擇。假設(shè)你是張楚，上周你班就學(xué)校組織學(xué)生郊游問題展開了討論。現(xiàn)在，請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提示給某英語報(bào)社寫信，談?wù)動(dòng)懻撉闆r。

1．外出郊游的好處；2．外出郊游應(yīng)注意之處；3．你本人的看法。

注意：1．詞數(shù)：120左右，信的開頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫好，并不計(jì)人總詞數(shù)；

2．可適當(dāng)加入細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；3．參考詞匯：郊游 outing (cn.)

Dear Editor,

I’m a senior high school student named Zhang Chu. Last week, our class had a heated discussion about whether the school should organize any outing for us students. The results are as follows.

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Yours sincerely,

Zhang Chu

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Editor,

I’m a senior high school student named Zhang Chu. Last week, our class had a heated discussion about whether the school should organize any outing for us students. The results are as follows.

Outings have lots of advantages. For one thing, they can make us relaxed and enjoy the beauty of nature. For another, they help enrich our social experience and gain some practical survival skills.

However, there is still something we must keep in mind when go for an outing. Always put safety in the first place, for outings will be meaningless without safety. What’s more, environmental protection should also be our concern. For example, we can’t throw any litter anywhere we go.

In my opinion, we should take at least one outing each term to make us refreshed and get closer to nature.

Yours sincerely,

Zhang Chu

【解析】

試題分析：本篇作文叫小作者介紹外出郊游的一些情況，小作者首先要認(rèn)真閱讀前面的提示認(rèn)真審題，確定文章的中心。注意文章文體、人稱和時(shí)態(tài)。要求介紹。同時(shí)應(yīng)選用合適的連接詞或過渡詞，使文章具有一定的連貫性。小作者還必須認(rèn)真查驗(yàn)是否有漏寫情況，有無拼寫錯(cuò)誤及標(biāo)點(diǎn)誤用等。

寫作亮點(diǎn)：這篇短文不僅使用了大量的的短語，可見該生英語功底扎實(shí)。如For one thing, they can make us relaxed and enjoy the beauty of nature. For another, they help enrich our social experience and gain some practical survival skills. However, there is still something we must keep in mind when go for an outing.等使文章的表達(dá)更豐富，更有邏輯性，更富有條理。